Comments on: Open Rights Group – Standing For the Board of Directors http://shkspr.mobi/blog/index.php/2010/01/open-rights-group-standing-for-the-board-of-directors/ Mobiles, Shakespeare, Politics, Usability. Tue, 07 Feb 2012 17:59:37 +0000 hourly 1 http://wordpress.org/?v=3.3.1 By: Terence Edenhttp://shkspr.mobi/blog/index.php/2010/01/open-rights-group-standing-for-the-board-of-directors/#comment-5212 Terence Eden Tue, 23 Feb 2010 10:34:49 +0000 http://shkspr.mobi/blog/?p=1511#comment-5212 Thanks. Sadly, I came 3rd. Still - there's always next year! Thanks. Sadly, I came 3rd. Still – there’s always next year!

]]> By: Saheb Rauthttp://shkspr.mobi/blog/index.php/2010/01/open-rights-group-standing-for-the-board-of-directors/#comment-5211 Saheb Raut Tue, 23 Feb 2010 08:45:19 +0000 http://shkspr.mobi/blog/?p=1511#comment-5211 Looks good to me Terence – I’d vote for ya! Looks good to me Terence – I’d vote for ya!

]]> By: ORG Election – Terence Eden has a Bloghttp://shkspr.mobi/blog/index.php/2010/01/open-rights-group-standing-for-the-board-of-directors/#comment-4458 ORG Election – Terence Eden has a Blog Fri, 22 Jan 2010 07:02:22 +0000 http://shkspr.mobi/blog/?p=1511#comment-4458 [...] Thanks to those who helped me craft my statement. [...] [...] Thanks to those who helped me craft my statement. [...]

]]> By: Dennyhttp://shkspr.mobi/blog/index.php/2010/01/open-rights-group-standing-for-the-board-of-directors/#comment-4246 Denny Tue, 12 Jan 2010 20:33:36 +0000 http://shkspr.mobi/blog/?p=1511#comment-4246 Definitely an improvement. Cute numbering scheme to keep just a touch of humour in there, I see :)Something about this sentence bothers me: "We have to demand that our needs are met with Government action – or inaction."I do realise what you're saying - sometimes (often?) we want them not to do a Bad Thing, rather than wanting them to do a Good Thing - but campaigning for 'inaction' sounds weak, and that's what your sentence, paragraph and section end on, a weak note (imho). No immediate suggestions for rephrasing it though, sorry.In simpler news, I think you spelled 'resource' wrong - a general spellcheck might be in order - and the line spacing is scruffy - you've got gaps between some paragraphs and only line-breaks between others. Is the final section bullet points? Should it be? Definitely an improvement. Cute numbering scheme to keep just a touch of humour in there, I see :)

Something about this sentence bothers me: “We have to demand that our needs are met with Government action – or inaction.”

I do realise what you’re saying – sometimes (often?) we want them not to do a Bad Thing, rather than wanting them to do a Good Thing – but campaigning for ‘inaction’ sounds weak, and that’s what your sentence, paragraph and section end on, a weak note (imho). No immediate suggestions for rephrasing it though, sorry.

In simpler news, I think you spelled ‘resource’ wrong – a general spellcheck might be in order – and the line spacing is scruffy – you’ve got gaps between some paragraphs and only line-breaks between others. Is the final section bullet points? Should it be?

]]> By: Terence Edenhttp://shkspr.mobi/blog/index.php/2010/01/open-rights-group-standing-for-the-board-of-directors/#comment-4241 Terence Eden Tue, 12 Jan 2010 16:39:24 +0000 http://shkspr.mobi/blog/?p=1511#comment-4241 I've updated this based on your comments (and those emailed to me). Please let me know what you think. I’ve updated this based on your comments (and those emailed to me). Please let me know what you think.

]]> By: Spikehttp://shkspr.mobi/blog/index.php/2010/01/open-rights-group-standing-for-the-board-of-directors/#comment-4176 Spike Fri, 08 Jan 2010 19:29:32 +0000 http://shkspr.mobi/blog/?p=1511#comment-4176 Looks good to me Terence - I'd vote for ya! Looks good to me Terence – I’d vote for ya!

]]> By: Terence Edenhttp://shkspr.mobi/blog/index.php/2010/01/open-rights-group-standing-for-the-board-of-directors/#comment-4172 Terence Eden Fri, 08 Jan 2010 17:07:42 +0000 http://shkspr.mobi/blog/?p=1511#comment-4172 A good point. On re-reading, it's more of a reason to join the ORG, whereas this is targeted at existing members. Pity - I spent ages on those jokes. But, time flies when you're having puns! A good point. On re-reading, it’s more of a reason to join the ORG, whereas this is targeted at existing members.
Pity – I spent ages on those jokes. But, time flies when you’re having puns!

]]> By: Dennyhttp://shkspr.mobi/blog/index.php/2010/01/open-rights-group-standing-for-the-board-of-directors/#comment-4169 Denny Fri, 08 Jan 2010 16:38:38 +0000 http://shkspr.mobi/blog/?p=1511#comment-4169 I'd lose _all_ of the humour - the entire opening section, and the bit about teens and porn. Sorry, but I think it detracts from the well-articulated points you have to make, and I imagine you could use the room to make more of them.That said, I will very happily vote for you, regardless of the statement :) I’d lose _all_ of the humour – the entire opening section, and the bit about teens and porn. Sorry, but I think it detracts from the well-articulated points you have to make, and I imagine you could use the room to make more of them.

That said, I will very happily vote for you, regardless of the statement :)

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